Writing An Obituary
Food Connoisseur Ada Faire Moore Dies In A Grilling Accident
Ada Moore, caring food connoisseur living in Portland Oregon died at the age of 65 on her birthday due to an ironic grilling accident.
Ada's death was confirmed by her close business partner on the day of her passing. Ada will be remembered and missed for her wonderful accomplishments in her well-lived life. She received a masters degree at the Institute of Culinary Education, Americas number one culinary school and went on to win many awards for her excellent skill.
Ada Moore on her way back home from her wonderful day of birthday fun arrived at home with her best friend from her work at 5:28pm when she then decided to cook up her favorite birthday dinner, some Capital T Tenders. Humming her way through the house she prepared her ingredients. Tenders, Panko bread crumbs, some spices, and most importantly the secret ingredient, It was now 5:39. With all going smoothly Ada stepped outside her plant covered, one-story, self designed house to the patio. The grill awaited her as it sat in silence and glistened in the sunlight, it was now 5:47 and the air was a perfect 72 degrees. "Now we're cooking with gas!" Ada says as she turned on the gas. She put the tenders on the grill one by one. The grill was not hot enough yet so she decided to pour some oil on it to make the fire flame up, this was her mistake..her last mistake. It was too late said Ada's close business best friend "She lit up so fast.. she was on fire! she was hot, piping hot!!" It was too late before the paramedics got to her home, Ada sadly had died from fourth degree burns all over the body.
This obit is well-written. I wish you had spent a little bit more time elaborating on the wonderful accomplishments of the caring food connoisseur and less on the spectacular details of her death, but I do applaud your imaginative if grisly effort at descriptive writing. 92
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